Third, the reading's viewpoint that the Greeks had had flaming arrows, which have same effect as buringburning mirror, so they didn't need to create a new weapon, is also contradicted by the professor

其实主要意思想表达the reading's viewpoint that。。。is also contradicted by the professor。但是不知道中间加了从句和so引导的句子后这么写还对不对?标点用法(一逗到底)有没有问题呢?不对的话怎样才能使句子变对。

提问者: zuokanyunqi123 2015-01-28 22:53

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Dais 2015-07-09 17:17

其实英语写作的句子最好不要太长,尤其我们是non-native speaker,很容易出现句式语法的错误。这个句子长从句做句式结构使得意思不清楚,而且不是很平衡。
我按照我的理解稍微重新写了一下(仅供参考啊啊,本人也苦逼本科生一枚。。)
Third, there is another viewpoint from reading is contradict to the lecture. Reading states that the Greeks had flaming(不造你问什么用这个时态嘞,原文吗?) arrows, which have same effects as burning mirror。Thus, they did not need to create a new weapon. However, professor argues......
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sokiller 2015-01-29 00:30

1、你这个句子写的过于复杂,中间那个从句可以单拿出来说;

2、这个综合写作的开头也不是很理想。个人推荐的写法是:

Third, the passage points out that it is unnecessary for Greeks to build XXXX mirror, as they can use flaming arrows in combat, which obviously has same effect. However, the professor argues that balala......

个人觉得这种写法层次感更强,逻辑更直观,方便rater阅读,也方便你展开观点。。。

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